***Check out the new and revised version of this story at my portfolio!***
Dasharatha: Look, Rama. Everything the light touches is our kingdom.
Dasharatha: Look, Rama. Everything the light touches is our kingdom.
Rama: Woah...
Dasharatha: Just as the sun rises and falls everyday, the king's rule rises and falls every now and then. One day, the sun will set on my time here, and will rise with you as king.
Rama: And this will all be mine?
Dasharatha: Everything the light touches.
Rama: ...But father, what about that forest over there, just beyond the light?
Dasharatha: That is a tricky place, Rama. There are dangerous creatures there and illusions beyond our scope of mind. You must never go there. Never.
*One month earlier*
Rama and Sita, who had recently gotten married, decided they wanted to get out of the palace and have a picnic in a beautiful park by the forest surrounding the kingdom in Ayodhya. They settled down for lunch and were enjoying the peaceful breeze when something immediately got Sita's attention: a perfect, golden deer. Rama could tell from the look in her eyes that she craved to hold the golden deer, and since he had vowed to always make her the happiest woman in the world, he began to call to the deer. When the deer trotted away from Rama, he went closer and attempted to embrace it. The deer kept backing away, but Rama was determined to make the deer his friend by sunset. He chased the deer farther and farther into the forest, when suddenly he heard a battle cry coming from the kingdom. He immediately realized his mistake: the golden deer was a diversion and both him and Sita fell for it. He knew he was never supposed to go into the forest, he knew there were many illusions that distorted reality, but he had not heeded his father's words of advice. He rushed back to the kingdom with Sita, and what he saw left them both speechless.
The streets of Ayodhya were flooded with Ravana's army and the palace was undergoing a stampede by Ravana's chariot and thousands of rakshasas. In the distance, Rama could see his brother Lakshmana in the middle of the fight with a hundred rakshasas surrounding him. Dasharatha was attempting to save him, while Rama silently stood, watching the fight. He did not carry his bow and arrow to the picnic with Sita, so he desperately watched as the entire kingdom tried to fight Ravana's army and as Dasharatha took Lakshmana's spot in the fight. As soon as Dasharatha picked Lakshmana out of the fight, a rakshasa stabbed him straight through his heart. Rama, Lakshmana, Sita, and the rest of Ayodhya's citizens suddenly dropped to the floor, surrendering to the demons that just slayed their favorite king right in front of their eyes. They could not believe it. As Ravana slowly got out of his chariot with an evil grin on all ten of his heads, all Rama could think about was his father's dead body and how the golden deer so wittingly deceived him. "I should have been more alert. I should have listened. This is all my fault. I did this." Rama muttered to himself as he slowly backed away, out of the palace. He could not handle it anymore. He turned on his heel and ran. Ran far away. Through the forest, into another, and finally collapsed on a piece of land close to the beautiful pond.
*Present time*
*Present time*
Now, when Rama tried closing his eyes again, the creatures began whispering.
"Do you think he can see us?" the smaller one asked.
"Hanuman, don't be silly. Of course he can see us. He is only pretending he cannot."
"Then why is he not saying anything, Sugriva?"
"I don't know, let's ask him."
"Oh, don't bother." Rama finally spoke.
Sugriva, the larger monkey, laid down next to Rama. "What brings you here? I haven't seen your kind around in a long time."
"I'm nobody. I just wanted to get away from my land." Rama answered.
As Hanuman also laid down next to Rama, his tail accidentally brushed across Rama's head and he immediately saw everything. He could see every minute of Rama's life and every person he cared about. He could even feel Rama's love for Sita, Lakshmana, and the rest of his home, as well as his grief over his father's death. At this moment, Hanuman realized it was his destiny to be Rama's companion for the rest of his life. After he explained this feeling and his purpose in life to both Rama and Sugriva, Sugriva decided that he too should help Rama in getting his kingdom back. Rama, for the first time since he ran away and exiled himself to the forests, finally had some hope. Hope that he might be able to enact revenge on Ravana and win his kingdom back.
Author's Note:
I'm sure most of you got the reference to the Lion King with the beginning quote, but in case you are not a Disney fan, just know that the Lion King is a CLASSIC. I love the movie so much, and when I read the part of the Ramayana where Rama is exiled into the forest, I immediately thought of the Lion King and how Simba runs away to the forest after his father Mufasa died in a stampede conducted by Simba's evil uncle Scar. I replaced Simba with Rama, Mufasa with Dasharatha, and Scar with Ravana. I decided to keep the main plot line of the Lion King, so that is why Rama decides to exile himself rather than someone else making him leave. I also love the characters Timon and Pumbaa in the Lion King because they are hilarious and good companions, so I thought Hanuman and Sugriva could be the two companions here, since Rama could not have beaten Ravana without them. I also decided to have Rama run away by himself, because in the Lion King, Simba runs away without telling anyone where he is going either. If I get a chance to finish the story, I'm sure you can tell how that would end: Sita would come looking for Rama, they would all go back together with Hanuman, Sugriva, and the rest of the monkey army, beat Ravana, and get the kingdom back. We'll see if I can do a part two to this :) Hope you guys enjoyed!
I want to say first off, Oh My Gosh! Within the first few lines I could picture the Lion King movie perfectly with this dialogue! Great job! I also, like how you flashed back a month earlier. It made me even more interested in what you had to say in your story. The way you combined the story of the golden dear and the Lion King was a really good choice because you were able to keep the stories pretty much the same on both sides. I am interested to see how this battle will go to get the kingdom back. Be sure to include details!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, thanks for reopening those age-old wounds by reminding me of Mufasa's death. Second, I think this was such a cute beginning to what seems like it could be an interesting series! I loved the references, but also that you related it back to the Ramayana and really made it your own. Your writing is very fun and vibrant to read.
ReplyDeleteHi Akriti!
ReplyDeleteThis was such a perfect little retelling of this story. As the others have mentioned, the dialogue was phenomenal. You captured the sass, the emotion, all of it. And these two stories that you've meshed together work very well. I also liked the way that you formatted the story, with the earlier dialogue more broken up, then the clear notation of a time change, and all that. It made the story very easy to follow and understand.